These last two weeks we have been doing a Descriptive peace of Writing. First we got two peer up with a buddy and put down descriptive sentences for these words Smell, Taste, See, Hear and feel.
As I rush through the crowd of people trying to find my way, I see the sky as a gradient painting. As I walk towards the bright lights I see myself staring at the dazzling Ferris wheel giving me an optical illusion.
I taste the candy floss which slowly melts in my mouth giving me a sugar rush, as it floats down my throat feeling like the same texture of sand. As I bite into the fresh hot dog it makes my mouth water.
I can see all the tired parents as their kids tug on their shirts asking joyfully to go on the rides. I notice all the kids terrified, screaming for their lives flying through the air.
Kia ora Katelin.
ReplyDeleteWow what a great piece of descriptive writing. I really enjoyed reading this piece as it made me feel like I was in the story. I like how you said the candy floss was floating down your throat. You also did a great job with describing the ferris wheel. Have you thought using a variety of different sentence starters, I have been working on using adverbs to begin my sentences.
What was your favourite part about writing this story.
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